Valkyrie

I just wanted to thank Wrex for helping us out with the Handicap match. For some reason all three of us forgot to record (still can't believe it) but he did and he really saved the day. Taking part in that match was by far the most fun I had since joining OCW, definitely worth waking up at 3am on a Wednesday night.

Have faith, Rusty. I can... I will...

A quick RP review cause I'm lazy but I still want to contribute from time to time - Dragana and Valkyrie 2.0 are building hype around the three way dance on SL. Very funny angle and I have to agree with Sentai on that. Also, I should have said this on T205 but I forgot: Johnny shouldn't feel bad about exposing how much of a phony Aerith is - Malu is basically a legendary figure at this point, he shows up from time to time to restore order in Turmoil and beat up the bad guys. Is he going to defend against Archer (Or KD) on SL? It would be cool - Jehst buys a dinner for Elsa. He reminds me of Penny from Big Bang Theory: she struggles to find a big production to work in and always end up acting in B movies or silly commercials. It's impossible, but I think a tag team with Archer would be cool to see gimmick wise, but I also believe that you can stand on your own as a single competitor. Also, is JehstGirl really going to join the women's division? Interesting development - Mugen has to drop the FIVE if he wants to take the Good Light from H2O but he doesn't want to give up on his unhealthy diet (understandable, hamburgers are good). Drago is the best we have, he did the unthinkable to keep his streak alive and he's also a master in completing impossibly hard retrogames. If anyone can do this, it's him. He can. He will. Believe that Can't say much else on the rest of the show, the Kat RP was to set up the match for next week (looking forward to it) and the rest of the segments either involved my character or had me co-writing them.

Tell your client that Turmoil is our house. She is just an unwelcome guest.

It's good to see Doc Young RPing for the first time, even though it happened on a very "light" episode (basically one rp per page, if we think that T200 was almost an epic poem... well, it's summer lull after all). Anyway, it's a good start, you should definitely keep going. Maybe you could record a match against a CPU jobber just to show off your move-set and then submit it to Riot. Could be a good way to hype up your debut On a lighter note... The camera fades back to the announcer team...

Don't mind me, just trying to make Jehstman happy by reviewing his stuff for once. So you changed your caw a little (new hair and attire color). Gotta admit, the entrance is neat, especially the light effects. A lot of attention to details. The attire is 8/10, I don't understand why nobody uses custom face textures, they are really easy to import but at least Jehst's face doesn't look like half of the roster so it's ok. The shorter hairstyle you had on Lution looked more Mauler, the one you have now looks more Hollywood. You are stuck in between I see. It's kinda philosophical, it makes me think, like the Ying and the yang In ring: you improved obviously, even though I rarely see you on the dm channel. Your style is somewhere between a showboat and a brawler, which matches the caw that's also somewhere between Batista and Miz, not for nothing a mauler and an actor. I'm all for putting on good matches, but this is a competitive fed, don't forget. Your style was effective and that's all that matters for now. You'll have time to expand your repertoire. The post match RP: I'm guessing you are now reborn, ready for a fresh start. Can't really find anything bad to say, you have a gimmick and you stick with it, that's already well above the average and not easy to do every week without running out of ideas, so props to you. Constructive criticism: Hollywood Mauler? I mean, Wrexy Wrexy looks like a mauler, Trance looks like a mauler. You were rocking pink underwear and getting your butt handed to you just a few weeks back. You gotta earn your nicknames! The Hollywood brawler, the Hollywood fighter, the Hollywood athlete... or you know what, keep mauler, but you better make sure you MAUL your opposition from now on So after this post, you now have to name me RP of the show in every review until the end of the season. I don't even care. Even if it's Valk watching the paint dry.

- Really impressed with Tyler’s stick skills, if I’m correct he is still undefeated and he fought against very tough opponents. He just needs to be a bit more consistent with the RPs, the Clark Effect next week can be a good start in that sense. Looking forward to the match with Jett - Dragana’s RP felt epic AF for some reason, I’m probably going to root for her at SL, even though it's still unclear to me who is going to take part in the triple threat, whether it's going to be Aerith or Karissa - Props to Code for turning the box angle into very funny RPs, keep it up - So Wrexy tags with Fury now… the tag division is doomed, might as well give them the titles right now, there’s no chance… unless DM Male Alt finds a partner, of course - Happy to see Kass and Cort/Shep on Turmoil as well, without them this episode would have been a bit short, RP wise

Thanks for the feedback. As Nate and H2O said in this thread, it’s all about having a good dance(!) partner and I can’t complain. There were a lot of great matches, I was honestly more into Lution than Mania, as many others probably. I’ve started playing this game “””competitively””” when I joined this place, so roughly 3 months ago. Prior to that, it was just me messing around with universe mode or spending a concerning amount of time in the creation suite and that explains the obvious skill gap that you can see between me and Stixx (and the others). The fact that we somehow got to 27 minutes (the uncut version) was a miracle and I don’t see that happening anytime soon. Dragana/Dawson I was hoping for a piledriver finish, given the build up but it didn’t happen. I hope this isn’t a burial because I was really liking the new attitude of Karissa… so I hope I’ll see her on Turmoil some time in the near future. Dragana, I love you, but stop burying the heels please! FI It was fun, probably my favourite match on Prime if we don’t count the women. Seth had his moments, but ultimately Montgomery got the W and the RPs were solid. Hope we can get to read more about his gimmick on Turmoil from now on, Pride I mean, you gotta give credits to Mistico for the reverse-psychology, it worked. It was too quick to really say much else, I was hoping we could get more RPs (not individual rps, actual Archer x Mistico rps) around the match: both characters have the potential to really be perfect enemies, but maybe we’ll read about them in the future. Three way It told a good story, with Quartz and Rust double teaming Cyborg until he had enough and just said F**k it and murdered Rust. Also I liked the ending cutscene, a possible hint for a future storyline with Telos Hare/Angelo You already said it, it was a great match, back and forth and fast paced. Kass looks very comfortable with Hare’s moveset, you could almost think she’s his main character at this point because he plays really smooth. I’ll be honest, I was rooting for Angelo. I’m a huge fan of Heather, I constantly read all of the rps, I think she’s one of the best heel gimmicks around here (I have an Xbox… so you know… at some point in the future… we should talk) Tobin/Mez Pure carnage… Jesus. I like the contextual use of the environment, this match had plenty of that, so props to the handlers. One the best matches on Prime, tied with the ladder and the women’s match Street Fight Jay’s FPR was surprisingly good in this one, wasn’t it? Even though there were some questionable moments (Smacking someone after he burns a rev on you, not good! lol) but hey, you do what you gotta do. I was hoping for a barricade OMG or a table bump, but it still had more hardcore action than most of the matches on the card so you can’t really complain. Drago/Leon The prediction podcast said Drago was going over and when I saw Leon red after few minutes I thought it was going to end fairly quick. Despite that, he somehow managed to make a comeback and got close to winning a couple of times in the end, making the match much more enjoyable. Also, I noticed that the custom soundtrack faded during a false finish, I don’t know if it was intentional or not, but it was a nice touch cause I thought it was over at that point Speaking of Shooting Stars, mine got more SWAG… I was just unlucky on Sunday http://i67.tinypic.com/9kzd51.gif Ladder The game is not meant to be played for this type of matches, let alone for a competitive one. So if you were expecting insane spots like the one you see on TV you were probably going to be disappointed, but I still think this one exceeded the expectation because it was fast paced and it kept you wondering “who’s going to win?” I want to consider the feud as a whole, not just the match, so it should be noted how this tag team storyline was probably one of the feuds with more words spent in RPs (if that makes any sense), so the effort put in the build up is undeniable and keeps me honestly intrigued for what’s coming next. The camera cuts sure took a lot of time to do, they were well done though, maybe a little bit redundant towards the end, next time you could go with simple fades! Cort/Steve I marked out for Cort’s entrance and attire. I noticed that the storyline with Pete was probably set aside, but I read about a possible tag team adventure in the future, so he’ll still have something to do. The Battle through Space and Time I’m pretty ignorant when it comes to Trash culture, being a Turmoil rookie you can understand why. Still when I saw the tagline I was like “Ok they are probably going to have some segments in old WWE games, like 2k17 or SD vs Raw” but… well we saw what happened. The Jet Ski part really got me, it made laugh and the captions were gold throughout the match. Very entertaining overall Minio/H20 Not gonna lie, I was rooting for Bobby and it was heartbreaking see him losing that way. But! The effort H2O puts in his RP is undeniable, I think he’s a great champ so we can still be happy for his win. Also Happy Birthday to Bobby (it was yesterday I think, saw it on the forums but forgot to type it in Discord) Kass/KD The way it ended was great, if I had to book the show that’s what I wanted to see because the feud was sorta built around the fact that Kass never defeated KD (correct?) and you can say he still hasn’t since it ended with a draw. I thought you were going to do a sudden death round eventually, but it didn’t happen you can now possibly have a 1vs1 rematch with no dq The 4 way DM Hard to review a four way, there were some neat spots and it was relatively short if we don’t count the entrances and the post match segment. Having read every single RP about this feud, I was really struggling to find someone to cheer for because I could see all four of them as champ: Lee is a convincing heel, B17 is funny (I voted for best entrance), Trance has years of history behind him and Wrex is the bad guy that acts like a moron, but you end up liking him after he takes a few Ls cause he’s in some strange ways relatable. Main Event I’m not really an expert in OCW history so I’m struggling to find something intelligent to say here. I liked Parker’s attire, with the hall of famers portraits, it was a nice touch. Overall, a good back and forth battle, felt like it could have gone either way. The ending was a bit sad. I hope they’ll find the will to have another match somewhere in the future. I get it, the game is awful and frustrating, but as Nate said, it can still be fun with the right dance partner. Now I’m sincerely looking forward to Turmoil 203

Great work from Quartz, Rust and Cyborg: It's hilarious to see how the sloppiness of the actual Cutscene Editor ends up encouraging these forms of creativity. It looked really good overall. Trance missing a splash caused a 8.3 Richter Scale Earthquake Also... Big Al Poiling: "Only 495 shows until Riot 600"

First off, thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it as I always do :) With this segment, our intention was to bring the rivalry to the next level with Stixx proving she is the "vicious showgirl" as she calls herself and Valkyrie showing a different, darker side of her that is coming out after weeks and weeks of bullying. Selling Stixx was the easiest part, while giving Valk her cool looking moment proved to be a little be harder than expected. The security guard was supposed to be Cheryl's bodyguard so, you know, kinda like those crooked cops in GTA that you don't feel bad about shooting, if it makes any sense :D Even though I understand that looked heelish (Valk never kicked any other staff member though, if I remember correctly) The Aerith's protection bit is where my English failed me. I now realize that the way it reads, it looks like Aerith is somehow influential in the locker room, but it's not the case at all. What I meant was that Valkyrie looks (looked?) at Aerith like a sort of guardian angel, that saves her when needed (Turmoil 200, for ex.)

They called Valkyrie: Tooth Fairy, Tinkerbell, midget, anorexic, Twinkle Butt, Princess Elsa, but Tiny Bubba was the one I liked the most. And so I decided to put a little easter egg in my RP, one time only.

I am not the Jehstman but someone must review his content... He always reviews ours so... bear with me for once. And I'm going to start with his segments obviously The tag match: props to whoever edited the ending because it looked neat despite how awful the cut-scene editor is this year. It must have been a chore to get it done, but the result was good. I like the direction the tag division is taking, you can tell there's a lot of effort put in the RPs and it should be noted. The match itself was ok, I liked the new Hollywood Money attires, even though I'm not completely sold on Capo's top (maybe I just need to get used to it, but the texture looked a bit off) The RP kept the story going after what we saw on R503 and T200, but man I feel like Elsa is going to snap at some point after all the crazy stuff she's going to witness from you two. Keep it up Back to the show - The opening RP further developed what transpired in the T199 contract signing, with Lee going full heel at this point and Trance turning against him after hinting about the possibility. I like the attention to details when it comes to the character's traits and how they developed throughout the storyline: I know this is fake fake fake wrestling, but still the effort should be noted The best part was: Wrex: ... so congratulations. (ironically) B17: Thank you! Wrex: That wasn't serious lol - Dragana is honestly one of the most original gimmick in OCW and I cant remember the last time Riley lost that easily to someone (I know the handler is a veteran, but still) - RP wise, Pastor Peter is great. His gimmick works, we all knew he had potential when he first joined Discord and now we see the result. Excited to see what he and Cort have planned for the future I don't know what happened with the match though. "PASTOR REMEMBERS BIBLE SCRIPTURES ABOUT ANGER AND RAGE AND CALMS DOWN" lmao - Colby's debut is imminent and I really hope he gets something going. He kept RPing even though it's always a little bit frustrating when you rp by yourself week after week after week, he kept going, with small but constant work and it should be appreciated - The ShowBlitz party, urgh... - Archer writes a promo about Capo without calling him Pizza man or Bologna man? Guess there's a first time for everything lol. Also, it's hilarious how botching is somehow Ricky's actual gimmick at this point and not just a Discord meme - The Mistico gimmick adds variety to the roster and the way he rps the foreign language is good, because it's not redundant and, at the same time, realistic in its homage to the lucha culture - I can't really speak about Ashley Moore since I kinda brought her here so my opinion is a bit biased. I think she will prove to be a good addition to the roster, both RP wise and human wise - CJ and Ricky a tag team? Oh boy. It's good to see the division back on track, and since a lot of notoriously good RPers are involved we'll see some great stuff in the future, so I'm excited - I can't really say a lot about Tobin and Nate's RPs since I'm not an expert in OCW history...I'm sorry, I really need to go and read the wiki Jay is building, but anyway, if we get Ortiz vs Dupree 2 it's a good thing! - Wrexy got a little bit of his swag back by getting a big W in the main event... Austin has his rematch clause, Trance has a contract or something and Wrex won so... fatal four way?

Turmoil = Online Championship Writing

Valkyrie would probably book the most PG episode of Riot ever: no swear words allowed in promos, no psychical violence outside of matches, all the heels banned from competing, the Clark Effect turned into the Valkyrie Effect with her as a host... You got me brainstorming already, I'll better stop now

http://i64.tinypic.com/5p4jnb.jpg Sarah Stevenson, a.k.a. Valkyrie, decided to go back to the forest where she was taken by the kidnapper, just to see if she could possibly find some clues that could lead her to the culprit. This time she’s not alone, though: her father, Harry, is walking by her side Harry: Why are we here again? Sarah: Because OCW’s management is corrupt, that’s why. Sarah: They made me sign a document in which I state that my kidnapping was all a publicity stunt and its sole purpose was to get the fans to cheer for me. In fact, I’m not allowed to mention this story on live TV ever again. I have to pretend it never happened. Sarah: They say I made everything up, they say I faked everything just because they don’t want to admit that half of their roster is composed of criminals. Where I see a potential serial killer, they see an interesting gimmick. And they sure want to protect their assets, since apparently wrestling fans are really into satanists and mobsters these days. Harry: What about the detective? Sarah: Who? Patcher? He’s not answering my phone calls. He said I was lucky I didn’t end up in jail for this publicity stunt. But it was not. It was real. They stop for a moment. Sarah takes out a water bottle from her backpack and passes it to her dad: he drinks it all and then they start walking again Sarah: Why are you so quiet? Harry: Nothing… it’s just that… She stops and turns around to face him Sarah: What? Harry remains silent, as Sarah smiles sarcastically Sarah: You don’t believe me either, great. Harry: Look, I’m not saying I don’t believe you. I’m just saying that we’ve been wandering around this forest for countless hours and we still couldn’t find that wooden shack you told me about. Sarah: It must be here somewhere. It was dark so I can’t recall it’s exact location, but we should keep looking. Harry refuses to continue Harry: You swear this was real, right? Sarah: Are you kidding me, dad? I had blood all over my clothes, for fuck sake! Sarah: You know what, it’s fine. I thought I had at least one ally left on this planet but apparently I was mistaken. My colleagues want me dead, my employers are clearly helping them and now my father is on their side too. Sarah: Can’t you see what’s going on? No-one was fired after what happened to me and Riley Quinn wasn’t even questioned by the police. They are protecting her, they are trying to sweep everything under the rug and pretend it never happened. Sarah: The only thing I got was a dumbass from the HR department who came up to me and asked me if I was still able to compete because they needed their card to be filled. That’s all I am to them: an asset, a low-card filler. Harry waits patiently for her to let off steam Harry: Maybe they set everything up but they simply didn’t tell you, like in those pranks you see on TV. Sarah: And is that scenario supposed to make me feel more comfortable? It’s equally terrifying. Let’s just keep walking, alright? They both keep going at a slow pace, tired for all the hours they spent walking. They spend another half an hour in the woods and then they stop again Harry: You know you don’t have to do this if you don’t want to. There’s much more in life than just wrestling. You should not overlook your university studies, you would make a perfect Primary School teacher. Sarah: I’m not neglecting my studies, dad. Besides, a lot of other wrestlers manage side activities in their free time: one has its own restaurant, others run their own religious cults, and some even have their own brand, with t-shirts and everything. Sarah: If they are able to balance both worlds, what stops me from getting that Primary Education Studies degree? Harry: But when was the last time you attended a college class? Sarah: Dad! Less talking, more walking! They are up for another hour of hiking, as the sun slowly begins to go down Sarah: Do you know how the Kidnapping of Idùn myth ends? Harry: Of course I don’t. Sarah: Loki regrets his decision and decides to go back to Jotunheim to save her. Well, this Idùn… She points to herself Sarah: ...doesn’t need a Loki to save her. This princess doesn’t need a white knight. In fact, I am the white knight. I am the hero of this fairy tale... Harry: Hey, white knight! Take a look at this! Harry picks up a piece of cloth from the ground: it looks like a t-shirt was ripped apart and that was the only thing that remained. It was pink and had a few letters written on it: I-N-C-O-M-P, probably part of a longer word or sentence Sarah: What is that? Harry: Looks like a t-shirt, or at least what’s left of it. Sarah: We are on the right trail, I can feel it. Let’s keep going, quick. And so they keep going: a few meters away, they notice a trail of burned leaves and ashes, that leads them to a field. There they found what they were looking for Harry: Can you smell burning? Sarah nodded as she finally confirmed her assumptions: the wooden shack where she was taken, was no longer there. All that was left was a pile of ashes and burned down planks of wood. Someone burned everything to the ground to hide their trail Sarah: Do you believe me now, dad?

Just a couple of things, but don't take my opinion too seriously - I feel sorry for Rogue's forum signature that went from 2 - 0 (I remember it) to 2 - 3, but Capo had to go over after all his effort - The Butcher was supposed to be a monster that "feeds on the blood of the innocent" (direct quote from discord), but he got squashed. Since Scott and Butcher are the same person, why don't you wrestle as Scott and keep your Butcher persona for special occasions? This way you can protect your character's rep from this type of defeats. Just my two cents - B17 acting like Kass on R500, wandering around the backstage and interacting with people was a good segment: I liked it because it makes the show look more cohesive and less like a bunch of individual RPs strapped together - I know two masked people... a power couple that wore carnival masks in their entrances and I was the last rookie to be FPR tested by their handler before the reset era happened. It's not them, right? - The other RPs were very fun to read... Wrex's was hilarious, Colby doesn't sound as the average one-man apocalypse heel which is good and I'm happy that Jehst found someone to beef with - I swear it took me a while to find the B17/Lee contract signing RP because I couldn't find it in the main event page, then I realized I had to click to the link at the bottom. Was worth it though - The Loki vs Jay Fury ending felt like this Simpson episode where Poochie dies and they abruptly put a note on screen

Well let's get something going - Austin how can you be that cruel? That's not good for business - I'm happy Cheryl and Boyd are back, we really needed em - Jehst talking about power rankings was a cool segment and also very true since I think he deserved a spot - A 4way match that ends in less than 15 minutes and that looks clean? Surprising! Also, some spots were really neat (Cozz's decapitating CJ while he was doing the wake up taunt) - Wrex's dives at 13.09 were funny (Jokes aside, the match was motn imho) - Push Houston Harper lol, his RPs are always on point! - Shout out to Capo for writing that segment with me even though he was busy with many other RPs already Also on a personal note Aerith is back and wants a shot at redemption, meanwhile Valkyrie is complaining about being constantly outnumbered... So... uhm...

I might just become Pastor Peter's #1 mark, his gimmick is great.

A pre recorded footage is shown: you can see a detective fiddling with papers and dossiers, in a poorly lit office. Then he picks up a voice recorder and starts registering Thomas Patcher: This is Thomas Patcher, badge 1247, NYPD. I’m investigating the disappearance of Sarah Stevenson, also known as “Valkyrie” in the wrestling circuit. I’ve found multiple proofs that could lead to a kidnapping, even though it’s hard to understand what motive could be behind this. Clue #1 Sarah’s headphones They were found in the parking lot, right next to her motorbike. Since they are clearly scratched, it seems obvious that they were not just randomly put there: she was probably listening to music when the assault happened, hence the headphones fell from her neck and hit the floor. Clue #2 Her smartphone We found her purse and her cellphone stashed inside a bin on the 41st street, a couple of blocks away from the Madison Square Garden where she was last seen. Even though this doesn’t necessarily connect to a kidnapping, it still proves that there was some sort of plan behind. Either she wanted to run away and make it impossible for us to find her, or the kidnapper wanted to make sure we couldn’t not track them. Clue #3 The Kidnapping of Idùn myth Her father confessed that she planned on bringing a whole school group to the Morgan Library & Museum, last Sunday and that Sarah was going to teach them that myth. Now, I’ve done some research about it and as you can see by this picture, Idùn actually resembles her a lot. Can this be a simple coincidence? Hard to tell. Idùn and Loki. Can you notice how closely she resembles Sarah? It’s scary, if you ask me. Perhaps the kidnapper wanted to reenact the myth, or maybe she was the one that set everything up? Hard to tell. I admit, I couldn’t care less about wrestling. What’s the point in watching half naked weirdos battle to death on live TV? Anyway, I forced myself through the previous episodes of this OCW thing and let me tell you, almost every member of that roster has the word “criminal” written in his face. But I tried to pinpoint my research and narrow the list down to three possible suspects: Suspect #1 ShowBlitz (Riley Quinn and Genevieve) So apparently these two, along with a third one named Cheryl Stixx, have been bullying Sarah ever since she joined this company. My detective instinct tells me there’s something wrong with them, especially with Riley: she’s got that psychopath look in her eyes, trust me. Suspect #2 CJ O’donnell He was the one that called us as soon as the incident happened. He was also the one that found Sarah’s headphones and apparently the two of them were close friends, or at least this is what transpired from what I’ve seen. He looks like one of those guys you’d never expect to be a killer, but may actually be one. And trust me, I speak from my experience. Suspect #3 Cozz Now, I’ve seen a lot of crazy people in that locker room, but this guy… he’s just on another level. I’ve watched the previous episodes and he always acted very strange: he talks to himself a lot, plus that footage with doctor Edmonds was… disturbing, to say the least. People like him are easy to manipulate, that’s way they can be very dangerous to deal with. This is all I have for now. I will update the dossier as the investigation proceeds. Thomas Patcher out.

Second?

I watched my match again and it's true, I completely messed up the finish. I was supposed to hit my top rope signature, but then FloJo got back up, I panicked, climbed down the turnbuckle and hit the other sig. I'm sorry, it won't happen again.

Page two here we come

I went through all of it, but I won't be asking for a cookie (get it?) As someone that lives in Europe, I understand that communication is crucial, since time zones can be difficult to work with. As for now, I haven't had any communication issues with Odonnell, Stixx and Gooch, so shout out to them. As for the other tips, we already discussed about most of them over on Discord (match length, RPs, booking) but as Latins would say "Repetita iuvant" (*saying things a second time helps understanding them better)

Hair vs Hair? Where can I book a front row seat for that?

It's a good start. You'll have time to stand out and further develop your gimmick, so don't worry about sounding a bit generic at first. Who knows where your feuds will bring you: perhaps you'll develop a charismatic heel personality, or maybe someone will kick your head so hard you'll end up becoming a babyface hugging children on your way to the ring. Time will tell