Gabriel Alpha Posted October 16, 2007 Posted October 16, 2007 The scene starts what appears to be a disused factory, the whole area is only lit by the pale moonlight shining in through the cracked window panes. The camera floats around the building showing the viewer that the area is indeed empty, and only the mice wonder this once great building. In the background you can hear some old music playing from a grammaphone that skips a beat every now and then, finally you come across a room where there is a light on, it is powered by a cable and the light swings in the doorway, you can see a table in the corner and on it are various tools, next to the table is a chair with its back facing you and you can see what looks like a person sitting in it. The camera waits patiently as the music plays and then suddenly it stops as the needle finally slips off the record and the light goes out. You hear a groan and darkness now engulfs the room. Out of this darkness you hear the chair swing round and then the lights come back on. Sitting on the chair is not a person as you first imagine, but a dummy, a clown dressed up to like look something from the film ‘IT’ and a piece of cardboard with the word SAW written on it. ………………………………............................................................................ The scene opens to a group of wrestlers standing around a ring watching a masked man fight another smaller Mexican wrestler who is kicking his ass left right and centre. The Mexican known as the Luchre Dor of New Mexico hammers home another high flying move knocking the masked wrestler to the floor and Luchre runs round the ring and jumps onto the ring post taunting the crowd as the other wrestlers lap it up. The masked wrestler rolls out the ring and holding his head walks into the back as the camera follows, he sits down on a chair in the dressing room and nurses his head whilst sipping a water bottle and cursing under his breath. He stands up to get ready for a shower when from behind something hits him and he falls to the floor, as the lights go out he knows he is in trouble. ……………………………….............................................................................. The lights flicker on and off in a steady pattern, the room is nothing more then a shell with a ring in the middle and two men including the clown tied to ring posts facing each other. In the middle of the ring a fat guy lays on the ground snoring and letting dribble slowly drip out his mouth and onto the matt. After a few moments the masked wrestler starts to come too and panics as he realises someone has attacked him. He frantically looks around sees the fat guy snoring and then notices the other guy tied in the corner. Masked Wrestler: Hey….. Hey fatty wake up, or you…. Over there wake up homie and help me, what the fuck is going on? The fat guy stirs a little, then rolls over, on his t-shirt you can make out some writing as the lights continue to flicker. From across the room the other guy starts to come to, he is a well built guy with bleach blond hair and no top on, from the looks of the things he has been there a while as his body shows signs of fatigue. He looks up and sees the fat guy then the masked wrestler across the ring from him. Guy: Hey, what your new here? Why you? Do you even have a clue what is going on? Masked Wrestler: I don’t have a clue man, what the fuck is this? One minute I’m getting a kick in from some Mexican wrestler, then I’m here watching that fat shit sleep whilst some sick leaves us here to die! Guy: Oh we ain’t dying, but I don’t know what the hell he wants! Masked Wrestler: How long you been here? Guy: I don’t have a clue, one minute I was watching tv, the next I was sitting here in this ring watching the fat guy sleep... Masked Wrestler: Man, lets just get out of here! The masked wrestler tries to get up but as he does he falls back down as the cuffs around his hand are too tight to the ring post. The other guy tries to struggle free but again to no avail, so they both sit back down frustrated and annoyed, then they start to talk again. Realising they still have one hand free though, they both try to pull at the cuffs one more time before giving up. Guy: So what’s your name? Masked Wrestler: Sanchez, you? Guy: James….. What the fuck are we going to do? Sanchez: No clue man, you got a light? James: Sure I think so…. Hold on I’ll check… James puts his hand in his pocket and as he does looks puzzled, he then pulls out a tape and looks at it, on the front panel it has a sign which says ‘Play me’…. He looks at Sanchez who rapidly puts his hand in his pocket and comes out with a player. Sanchez: Throw me the tape… James: No, you slide me the player…… Sanchez does as he is told and James manages to pull the player within reach by using his feet as an aid. He places the tape in the recorder and presses play as they both listen intently to what is said. Voice on tape (a low gravely sounding voice): Why you may be asking am I here sitting in a ring with a fat man drooling over it? Why me? Why me indeed…. You see, you’re here to play a game, I like games and after I am done so will you! James and Sanchez look up at each other in confusion as the tape continues to play…. Voice: Under the ring is a hacksaw you can use to free yourself, if you reach underneath with your free hand you will find it taped close enough for you to reach, use it to free yourself, but be warned, once the tape is ripped there is a bomb attached to the ring, you try to leave by any of the exits and the whole place goes up, the only way to live is to figure out exactly what I want you to do, and just to make things that little more interesting, you only have an hour to do it, if not the whole room goes up anyway…. I hope this makes things clear….. I’m watching…… James and Sanchez hurridly look under the ring with the one free hand and manage to find the hacksaws, they pull them up from the ring and in the corner wall a light appears with a timer counting down from 60:00.….. They both look up at it, before turning their bodies round and cutting through the cuffs attaching them to the ring. Once finished they both look around for a moment and they find various weapons lying around such as the classic trash can, a 2x4 and a barbed wire bat. James (holding the bat): Do you think he wants us to wrestle? Sanchez: I already took a beating once today so forget it, I ain’t in the mood for this bullshit… I’m outta here. Sanchez climbs out the ring and heads towards the exit door, he goes to open it but as he does it just slams against a wall on the other side. He tries again, not sure what is happening he looks through the slim gap and then punches the door in frustration. Sanchez: It’s a bloody brick wall! There is no way out! James: Try the other corner! Sanchez is about to walk over to the other side of the room where another exit is located when the timer comes to a halt, a projection appears on one of the walls and appears to be playing an old film, both men lean against the ropes of the ring and watch as the film shows the very ring they are in with two other people who look similar to them walking about and swearing, they walk up the second exit and open the door, the camera cuts out just as you see a split second of film showing the room go up in flames.
Seth Morrison Posted October 17, 2007 Posted October 17, 2007 Ok, even though you were in a douche in the other thread, im going to give you some honest insight. 1) This RP was VERY well written. Probably one of the best written RPs ive seen in a while. You clearly get a total picture of whats going on in the RP, and and is very easy to follow. I actually enjoyed following it, for the most part. 2) With 1) being said, im sorry, but this is completely stupid. Only for the fact that ive seen saw, and wrestling can be morbid and horrific at times, i doubt its ever gotten to this. Add to the fact that it is a ripoff from a movie. Now with those things said, if you came up with something on your own, ( maybe taking bits and pieces from movies or something) you could have on hell of a RP, in which id mark for. And that doesnt happen alot. So just work on originality. Guy Fausto gives some good insight about how Efed RPs and gimmicks are made. SHould be a thread somewhere he made, a while back. Dane Xavier: cyber bullying is not only illegal, it's pathetic "I swear to go if you call me a Liberal again you RETHUGLICAN, SEE WHAT I DID THERE. This is america, if you want to throw your hard earned sweat money on a videogame gambling site and thus deny you and your family food and shelter THAN BY GOD DAMMIT YOU CAN, BECAUSE THIS IS AMERICA YOU COMMIE SOCIALIST. Now then when Can I expect your next donation? "- Jay Jay Double A is "The Weapon Of Mass Consumption"
Gabriel Alpha Posted October 17, 2007 Author Posted October 17, 2007 Cheers n thanks for your input. It was intended to be a rip-off however I understand what your saying n yeah expect a totally realistic wrestling related promo soon. Again thanks! ;)
Adrian Bold Posted October 17, 2007 Posted October 17, 2007 too long / didn't read http://i.imgur.com/zP10f.gif
Seth Morrison Posted October 17, 2007 Posted October 17, 2007 Cheers n thanks for your input. It was intended to be a rip-off however I understand what your saying n yeah expect a totally realistic wrestling related promo soon. Again thanks! ;) No problem bro, just wanted to shoot straight from the hip. Again, very nicely written, but next time make it more realistic, and make sure they are your own ideas. Most guys here will call you out, even if you ripped it off a show you dont think anyone has seen. Dane Xavier: cyber bullying is not only illegal, it's pathetic "I swear to go if you call me a Liberal again you RETHUGLICAN, SEE WHAT I DID THERE. This is america, if you want to throw your hard earned sweat money on a videogame gambling site and thus deny you and your family food and shelter THAN BY GOD DAMMIT YOU CAN, BECAUSE THIS IS AMERICA YOU COMMIE SOCIALIST. Now then when Can I expect your next donation? "- Jay Jay Double A is "The Weapon Of Mass Consumption"
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