Craig Casey Posted March 13, 2010 Posted March 13, 2010 I give the feedback... http://i43.tinypic.com/5fiyk7.gif
Mayhem Posted March 13, 2010 Posted March 13, 2010 Damin Christ RP Damian comes out talking about how some can barely remember him now that he's back in OCW and active might i add. Also talking about the EX devision being week, which in my eyes the number of EX guys here now makes it the strongest it's beenn in a few. Damian basiclly saying that he wonn't let the EX die and he wants to go after the EX gold which should be any EX wrestler's goal. We will see Damian. Devitt vs Nathan Gaines Two things I noticed about Devitt. One your using Prog metal so good for you, two you got the AJ styles (1) thing going on, and this is just my personal opinion but I'm getting tired of seeing that AJ Styles hoodie. Who let Terry Flunk into the building! Oh wait... Thats Gaines :D Now ummmm, Maybe I have been setting a bad example as of late with not having music during my matches but realize one thing here, I'am able to capture the audio from the game with the crowd, slam noises etc etc. I can see why leaving this blank got a bad comment afterwards. Honestly because of that I went right to the end of this match to see Gaines DQ his self. hmmm well maybe there will be something that developes out of this. Candy, Wesley, Trance RP Candy slaps a bitch who calls Wesley DaWonder Candy talks about the womans Championship I dont care for it, it pertains nothing to my charecters but ok I get it. Trance is seen down the hall from Candy and looks like she was trying to start some shit by going to Wesley real quick to tell him Trance is in the hallway. Wesley and Trance stand eye to eye. Wesley saying he wants the belt annd it his already. yet now Trance is starting to maybe care for the belt, and it looks like Weasel might not be able to steal it. Time to lace up because i think you got a fight on your hands. Page2 Judas and Craig RP Judas Hallows gettign out from his wagon heading into the arena and gets a call from whome as of the moment dont know. It seems like general connversation as he is getting direction to his locker room? How about the door that has your name on it. The next action sentences are slammed together, a bit of seperation there would make that a lot easier to read, I don't know maybe when it got posted it did that because it's happened to me. If not though, just add some seperation there, it makes it easier on the eyes. hmmmmm, okay I'm going to let my past years of doing contructionn go out the window here because this is fiction, but there are other things about this portion of the RP. This isn't the impact zone, according to the cards OCW does travel. What I myself would have done, some where in this RP or later in the night which would be funny in a way. Have movers walking in while judas was coming around the corner, so that way it doesnt seem like a reconstruction of a lockerroom just moving in a few things. later in the night if you had Fausto having the stuff being moved back out and flipping out a bit would have been funny but also add some tenacity and then do it all over againn ad pay the guys more than Fausto is willing to spend because he pays in nickles. A RETURN It was cool to see Fleminnem come back, I hope you make some good out of your return to OCW. Personality wise that might be some one good for Tuce tofued against considering he wants them hoes Nathan Gaines RP It's good to see Gaines RP because he was at the top of the ladder at a point and should be putting in good input. this also makes me feel that R2G wasn't just a one time thing and that you might be around for awhile. Nathan just made a threat if ayone notices to Wesley because men who have something to lose which would be you Nathan being that title shot. Me seem to act out a bit more drastic when they have things to lose. TRANCE vs Wesley Who let MVP in the building! Oh .. right... You could do better with that attire and make it your own man, thats almost just as bad as Hazard and maybe i didnt pay attentionnn to recent matches Wesley has had but yeah.... The match starts off at a very fast pace, I saw a huge irish whip slam in the 1st few seconds of this match which i'm not a big fan of. I like seeing people work up to the more powerfull moves they have. Wesley seems to be on with his reversing and sends Trance rebounding off of boths sides of the ring having Trance try a leg lariat and wiffing. LOL A small chain of reversals here and Trance finally gets Wesley knocked down followed by a standing shooting star press... Nice some exchanges happeneing here then Trance whipping Wesley into the corner reciving a springboard dropkick in the corner. Someone has been watching some Omega Dragon reruns :p Wesley trying to show off gets cought by trance. Something real quick, after people do the leapfrog it seems extremely hard to reverse the move following and I can never reverse that lepfrog in general. I've been trying trust me. Oh and some HWYs have Leapfrog and some of you are to big for that, lets be realistic here, get rid of it. Isn;t that slap Tuce's Sigature move? i would check on that. Also you do a Leg Drop 3 as a reg move and that Brandonn Hostile's Finisher FYi. Just a note people, if you have a fancy ass looking move the chances is it is some ones finisher, take a look in the locker room under signature and finishers to see if it belongs to anyone. Also too fancy of a move probably should be a finisher. Anyhow Wesley is working Trance right now, maybe to many tag matches lately Trance? Wesley goes up top for a moonsault, landing it. Now Wesley is about ready to end this one. Trance sends Wesley to the apron here and tries to knock him off but winds up having the roped pulled down on him. It looked like Wesley wanted to sprinngboard off the apron but Trance was quick to his feet and Wesley was quicker to get back in the ring as Trance went to grab his feet and wound hanging up the reff. Trance Grabs a chair and heads into the ring but the reff came too and Wesley tried to run him down but missed. Trance droping the chair as the reff briefly argued whipped WEsley into the corner followed by a clothesline. Now it's Trances turn to fly with a flying hirricanrana Trance locking up with Wesley and we get a nice chain of reversing here where Wesley tries for a dropkick to the back Trance swats him away and gives a nice side dropkick of his own followed by a roll up. Things wind up going to the outside and Trance misses a shootingn star to the outside, Wesley made his way to the apron again wating to go airborn but it just doesnt happen. Trance gets ahold of him dragging his legg off and making Wesley smack his face on the side of the ring. Trance goes inside and lands a nice quarkscrew body attack. One of my Fav's. Trance in controll and the Champ hits his signature reverse STO and goes up top. Wesley springs up sensing the end is near. Making a note even though Wesley used kip up he didnt rush trance on the TB, which i thought was very good ethics. that would have been cheesy. Trance catches Wesley showig off the no sell and hits another Huricannrana followed by the FROG SPLASH! this match is over. or is it.... Nathan Gaines's music hit on the PA but he no shows for a minute leading Wesley to get back to his feet and Trance and him circle the Terry Flunk arrives with new music. YES! (saracasim) Gaines grabs a chair and enters the ring, Trance slides out and I don't know if Nathan want to drill him with the chair but Wesley gets plowed for being there. Interesting turn here. We will have to see what happens cominng up next week. ALLEGIANCE RP No thats not a faction name, just saying. Smythe , Air and Myself gather to make a game plan tonight and see if there are any concerns that we need to take care of. Wondering where Leon is and his where abouts there is a bit of concern. Mayhem is still set on not needing anyones help for tonight and having a hard time accepting offers as he still isnt used to the situation with Leon. Sasha comes into the locker room followed by Leon. Finally. Leon making a brief apology and Smythe lays down the line up for the night. Mayhem still commenting as a one man army and Smythe quick to remind him that people are taking liberties and have no place in doing so. Reminding Mayhem that its better to be feared than loved. *Good line Smythe i didnt catch that, it's a nice reminder to the monster* Leon seems to care less about being fired and carries on like it never happened saying that Fausto is going to be exploited. he leaves the room being very vauge about it and leaving the rest of the group still confused. PAGE 3 Hawkins RP Glad to see new people RPing because the less you do so as a new person in OCW your value starts immediantly once your in the door, if you do nothing it will also decrease immediantly to. So a note to new guys if you want to move forward in the importance of OCW dont sit on your ass, take the initiative and get RP's in even if you dont haved a match and you will soon find your self being booked. Any how. HOLY SHIT A FACE! A good guy, finally. Felix plays to his role and telling Jim that if judas wants a RM, bring it, he would like to give the fans another go at a great match. Feeling the loss has not stunnned his path he will achive his goals here in OCW. Showing a interestt in the FI match he thinks he has a chance. "SON YOU DONT WANT THE MONSTER NOW, GIVE THAT SOME TIME. If you win, you take that oppertunity some where else where you have a better chance. Heed that advice" At the end here Felix spits out a nice challenge to Le Tuce, and thats good to see because i think people need to be showing interest in other titles, it helps build value. Right now Tuce is doing a great job at that to. Craig & Judas vs Hostile and Hazard Hey Hostile, keep your music. Mainly because no one uses that genre of music here. wait, that's not Hazard, thats Evan Knox! So Brandon Hostile has a new partner for the night and it's a good pick. Craig the HBK hair fitts great BTW. The beginning of the match is at a good speed and has some quick reversing followed by some quick tag interferance which fits Casey and Hallows. Hostile quick to get away from the Corner takes Casey down to size. Hostile keeping controll for a bit then tagging in Knox for a nice doube team move whipping Casey into the ropes landing a double arm drag. Knox now the lead man in the ring. Craig just can't catch a break here as he gets wipped into the corner then Knox goes to the air with a side kick. Craig grabbing the ref after getting to his feet quickly shoves him to the ground for no reason. "You Heel you". Craig now finally building some offense gets Hallows in the ring for a double team move of their own with a double gut buster. Although Judas should have tagged in for that one. Craig still the lead man in gets STOed followed by a leg drop to the southern region. There is some exchanges here but Craig needs to tag out here quickly because he is reeling. Craig gets his face kicked off by knox but that left him close to his corner as he gets back to his feet Judas has seen enough and finally tags himself in, and if I was Craig I wouldnt be complaining. Judas though coming in gets a quick flury from knox folowed by them exchanging some reversals only leading to Hallow's beinng wipped into the corner of Hostile and Knox. Knox tagging in Hostile kicks Judas down into the corner as Hostile runs to the other vertiacle corner going to the air for a COAST TO COAST!!! This really isnt looking good for Craig and Judas at this point. Holy Cow, Hotile just got opened up by a quick over castle by Judas! Hostil wasnt really worn down to begin with but maybe this is the tide turner. Judas running forward with a push kick sending hostile in a tumble. Judas was handleing this well and decided to tag back in Craig, I think Judas could have done some more damage honestly because at the same time Knox gets taged in as well. Craig just takes a beating this match IDC, there is some exchanges but Knox being a vet gets the better of it and was able to Nail his finisher to the forehead of Craig Casey with a jumping roundhouse. going for the pin Judas was quick to break it up. Craig getting to his feet with some help from Judas tieing up knoxk , Criag gets ahold of him for a nice Shattered Dreams <-- The real one. Craig tagging in Judas. Judas and Knox exchage well and Judas knocking knox out of the ring and Casey quick to jump down after him. Wow when the action is about to make it back to the ring Craig FAILS as he tries another arial assult to knox but he trips him up in mid air sending him down onnto his face. OUCH Knox finally looks like he might be reeling and Hostile wants in the ring badly. Knox after putting Judas in a triangle hold makes the tag and Hostil Charges inn to no avail. Judas in controll now putting Hostile into his Sharpshooter as Knox goes in for the save. then we get a disturbing song intentially played. I hate you editor. Craig gets taged in and winnds up getting worked by Hostile landing a buzzsaw rush. Judas quick to stop the momentum ties Hostile up against the ropes again getting away from Judas Hostiles runs up top and lands his Finisher Leg drop yet to get caught by Judas AGAIN! No luck the time there gave enough for Craig to regain compouser and kick out. Craig making a comeback and still gets rolled up by Hostile yet kicks out. Knox ready for this to end tags him self in and runs after craig only to get DDTed. Craig winds up hitting a rolling somoan drop followed by a big super kick! Trying for the pin Hostile comes in to break it up for the team and shortly after Knox jumps up for a crucifix pin for the 1 2 3. Hostile mad that Knox "stole the win" from him he tries to assult him but Knox is to quick and Nails his finisher laying Hostile out cold for a interest turn of events. KD RP KD, I would never say anything about being at the bottom of the ladder. You need to get out of that mind set. On another note I don't see how Dorien is helping your charecter development, you might want to drop him. PAGE 4 Leon & Fausto RP This is a great story builder for many people. To sum this up Fausto might be playing make believe here, and Leon says that GUY really doesnt have the power to fire him. So This should mean Leon is still active. Fausto really didn't like what Leon said and it made him twitchy so ther has to be some truth to it. Read it for your self. TREVOR VS SPOON What Hapened to SPOONS entrance :( it was awesome. I take it, who ever recorded didnt have the music, if i'm wrong why, why? The music is awesome go back to it. The rest is to come because it take a long time to type this shit up. https://t.me/pump_upp
Nathan Gaines Posted March 13, 2010 Posted March 13, 2010 Great great review....I like how you incorporate what you like and what you don't and than give feedback on how one might improve. Purpose of a great review. Not that mine will be as indepth but you've inspired me to make some comments as well LocoNY911: I hate you with every fiber of my being just looking at your name makes me want to strike my monitor
Pugh Posted March 13, 2010 Posted March 13, 2010 bump That word has never been uttered in a show thread before. Maybe Xcalifag did kill us after all :'( No.
Craig Casey Posted March 14, 2010 Posted March 14, 2010 This isn't the impact zone, according to the cards OCW does travel. Team super-awesome has it's own moving crew. ;) http://i43.tinypic.com/5fiyk7.gif
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