Pugh

That main event man. It's a TV match not the main event of lution. Learn to block or stay down

Couple of notes. Use established OCW interviewers from shows etc. In this case you have an intern so maybe name them? Makes it feel more real Just establishing that blacksmith will be there is plenty, you don't need to refer to stuff directly. You're looking to enhance intrigue about why hes there, here you've basically told us the content of your show promo a week out (some sort of security based angle). The fact he has security should be the first promo on the show

Been saying it for months. Jake makes it sound like wrestling, everyone else makes it sound like snooker

He does it for attention. Best to just ignore it like he ignores Bobby.

Oh you mean the worst part of Lution? Everybody watch this man. This is how he curries favour before he tries to bury your characters. Be mindful.

You are the problem Everrett

And no love for me making the match card template. Or Kent for the arena. This is why we quit.

Go nuts

I would like to point out that if you're upset about something I said, maybe look past the sadness and see if you can take something useful from what I said. I dont bury just to bury, I bury as a side effect of trying to improve ocw

...if he shows up

There is a promo on page 3. It is everything you should not do in an OCW promo. It has no focus and it reads like you don't know anything about the current landscape. It takes 2 seconds to see who current Champions are even if you don't know already. It had no point and was a waste of the 30 seconds it took me to read it.

The new meta is apparently having common sense

Title unification can't happen because of cross platform limitations. Nice to dream but, not gonna happen in a sane world Also water is wet.

That's like saying that you like pizza instead of cars... they're very different things.

I dont understand what "Its the meta" means, but is mid animation attacking "the meta"?

You need a concise book, and Jay verbally saying something once in a show thread isnt enough. Most people wont read it

B17 vs Code is pound for pound one of the worst matches I've ever seen in OCW. Yikes.

Actually I spoke to H2O about doing the rematch prolly a day after Devils Night. Spitballed a few ideas, but he was adamant that people were "desperate to see" Kass vs H2O at CG. So I found a plan b. It's not my fault that, fast forward a month, you've gone from having THE HOTTEST FEUD IN ALL THE LAND to jerking the curtain in a match nobody wants to see. That's just bad execution on your guys' part.

He read one word of your essay. He's the criticism monster you warned me about

Thoughts on Page One - Uncrowned Promo. Simple, to the point, continues continuity and sells the match as expected. This is what they're good at. -Tre is the standout in this promo for me. Never been a fan of Tyson, seems very one dimensional. Weird that Telos talks about Win/Loss then "putting on a show" almost in the same breath - jarring to me, but then Tre addresses it sort of. Just a weird like... idk. Synergy issue. I don't know if this was a group promo, but you can read up a few lines so you don't go over the same things or contradict your co-writer. Just my two CENTS - Match is whatever. WWE logo no thanks, Tre's music is V good. If there's one thing Tyson's handler can do, it's entrances... Biggest man in the ring brings a chair in after 8 seconds - um. Kickpads on a man with legs the size of tree trunks is weird to me, if he has them he should kick WAY more than he does. Tre comes out of this match looking most impressive to me, but ONLY BECAUSE the ending dragged me to the Sahara desert. HAMMERING THE FUCK OUT OF Y BEFORE TELOS IS EVEN ON HIS FEET. I guess someone said lag, but all I see is Doc going nuts in another multiman... - Ashley/Empress/Ashley promo cursed by the inclusion of this fucking horror show of an exchange "Empress: This place disturbingly reminds me of home. Walking my Fatter..fat..whatever Otōsan home from places like this late at night ..drunk off his ass. Blaine: Yeah, well if you were my daughter I would send him home drunk too." Couple of other botches "short term gag", PROOF READ YOUR SHIT PLS. Only major gripe "HOURS OF TIME PASS" in a single line... thats one of those opportunities to split it into two and make it feel like time has actually passed by having half of it later in the show, otherwise it loses all emphasis. - A sensational KD style promo where EVERY SINGLE ONE of Rust's alts appear together (I assume Aisu is a masked Arnaud but we'll find out later)... to say Zoey has a new haircut? I appreciate that you wanna get your alts on the show but... the promo didn't say anything really. Both of the points you hit, new look and match next week, will become obvious next time we see them, so a bit redundant to me. There's a fine line between character development and "meh". Couple of botches again, but second language so we'll skirt around those. Prolly branch out a little is what I would say - if your alts have nothing to do, find them something to do instead of insular promos. - On the flipside to the above, Bobby arrives with a masterful lesson in how to slow build a promo. It's an obvious intro promo, he hits enough points that you know it's building something later in the show. Doesn't rush, but doesn't waffle either. It's concise, it's serving a purpose and it's well written. Only criticism is the word "strap". Hate it. Please don't use it :(

This will simply not stand.

Suddenly I feel bad for Tre Golden. COULD IT BE THAT HE'S THE TRUE 5 STAR MEMBER OF RAGNAROK?!

I think the opening match might be a hate crime but I can't explain why

Dats the Kirkmanshulme Knot b. Go see Pugh vs Dupree ultimate submission match and learn a ting

You weren't involved in shit aha. FAME has been bubbling under the surface for 2 years. Longer than your career.