Ambition Episode 36!

[Aries]

I'll tell you how my xbox is! Stolen! And red ringed! That's how you motherfucker!

[Parker]

I'll tell you how my xbox is! Stolen! And red ringed! That's how you motherfucker!

 

It's hard for me to process insults of a grown man who got jacked by a fucking jersey shore reject.

[Aries]

It's hard for me to process insults of a grown man who got jacked by a fucking jersey shore reject.

 

 

He was white! I thought he was trustworthy! Apparently not. Fuck white people.

[Sean McGee]

sorry for not updating the thread....but yes that is my sib finisher!!!!

[Seth Irving]

Saying I got destroyed is a understatement

[K.Dangelo]

Yeah Parker we redid it .

[Illuminati]

I know I'm usually quite about these things, but seeing as how I feel like I really benefitted from these kinds of reviews when I was on on Ambition I'm gunna bite the bullet and try and churn one out.

 

Michael Hollywood's Hollywood Lounge

 

Before I talk about this I wanna say that I like that you took the initiative to do this despite not being booked. I've noticed that a lot of rooks will take not being booked as a free pass not to turn in content. The fact that you put this out not only shows me that you actually care about putting out quality content but that your character isn't a one-dimmensional character but has some substance.

 

As for the promo itself it was really good. Even though the [insert Heel's Name Here]+[Location] has become somewhat of a trope in wrestling you really made it your own. Even though you lost last week you managed to get yourself over blaming everyone but yourself, something I can definitely picture a character like yours doing.

 

Overall I thought this was a solid showing for you, you showed me that you were a snobby, arrogant prick; you showed me that your guy is going to blame everyone but himself for a loss; and most importantly you showed me he was a sleaze-ball with the reveal of the lovely Ms. Grace.

 

Tigerman vs Jordan Rivera

 

I like Rivera's look and entrance, Tigerman remains Tigerman. I was always a fan of big vs little-man matches so this was a treat. I honestly don't think you should have the headstand headlock, you'd honestly be better served with somekind of striking move like the knee strikes I think it would look better on you. Something thats just a pet-peeve of mine is that a guy as big as you probably shouldn't be going to the top-rope so early on, that kind of stuff should be reserved for a Sig/Fin or a big end of match moment, but thats just my personal taste in matches. Overall this was a good match, I like your look, I think your move-set could use a bit of tweaking, and with that you should see a huge improvement in the "look" of your matches and getting a bit of psychology down.

 

Grigori hanging out in the Basement

 

This promo was very reminiscent of some of the in ring promo's I did right before my Ex-Title run and Dimsmore's fall into heel...ness? So I have to say I do have a soft spot for these kinds of promos since they're very much up my alley. Its short, its sweet and you use a combination of your setting and actions to get over the fact that you're a psycho.

 

$eth Irvine and Jim Black

 

I liked this interview and how it set up the off-screen history between Irvine and Scofield. Once again, I have a soft spot for these off-screen rivalries. Its something me and Matsuda have done pretty extensively. Its a great way to pack an entire rivalries worth of hype/bad blood into a few RPs.

 

Tanner Shelton vs Jonathan Hardcastle

 

Honestly I'm not a fan of the clown look, but that's because I don't like clowns so take that as a bit of bias. I do however like your move-set because its a lot like the ones I use, I would like to see you throw some more taunts in to sell the crazy/arrogance I saw in your promo.

 

Shelton/Hardcastle Match Aftermath

 

More clowns... I don't like it (but I actually do because FEUDS!). I once again commend the rooks, this time Lazarus, who wasn't booked for showing up even though he wasn't booked. I like Lilith because she is just Girl Illuminati and I'm a huge fan of that style of gimmick.

 

Scofield response to Irvine

 

Once again rooks coming through in the clutch putting up content. Good Heel work, I like the arrogance and I like the fact that you aren't a chicken-shit but a more "dominant" heel.

 

Damien Kain vs Ace Angel

 

I like Damien Kain's new biker look, Damien Kane and Eerie Sunshine team up when? Ace Angel has been relegated to Ambition, I'm slightly disappointed, gone are the days when he works matches against greats such as Djesus Djones on RiOT ;_;7. LMAO 2Ref 2REF!!!!!111!1010 Kain's move-set works really well, I can see the POWAH in it, its simple and its brutal, shades of OG. What the fuck am I watching?! First Tigerman and now Ace Angel wins, JOBBER UPRISING. Aftermath fits your character and everything ends as it should.

 

Mendihaze walking down ahallway

 

Rooks coming through etc etc. I think I'm starting to make out Team Reliable 2.0. I see that you're trying to be more of a face but you come across as a bit of a pushover. I was actually picturing Michael Cera doing your promo. Its ok to be a little cocky as a face! But I think you'll be able to fall into a comfortable spot between your humility and being a big time face with time. In fact I remember a time when people were saying a young Tiberius Dupree was too arrogant to be a face.

 

Seth Irvine vs Sean Mcgee

 

Good Match, I know both of y'all have been around the block before so I don't really need to dispense my knowledge to you, this review is for the rooks!

 

 

OVERALL NOTES

-I like that there are all these feuds going on, good job rooks. Feuds=RATINGS

 

-Y'all rook's keep going for your finishers too early, unless they are meant to be lesser finishers that you don't win off of don't do it, it makes your finisher look weak/gives your opponent an extra finisher if they reverse.

 

-Proofreading is pretty baller, just go back and read your RP out loud and it should help you catch all the typos/ weird grammar.

 

-Not something that the rooks should note but as a suggestion to the staff, I think that Ambition would benefit from its own dedicated staff. Like its own announcers and I would love an on-screen manager/ person in charge, but that isn't a huge deal.

 

Beat you to it Jay : P

[Tiberius Dupree]

Why does Jordan Rivera look like Carlos Cruz?

 

Why does Carlos Cruz look like Jay Sensation?

 

Why does Jay Sensation look like...

 

http://www.urbanwrestlingfederation.com/data/19208/p42493.jpg

[Mr.Sensation]

Jordan Rivera

 

Entrance: C+

Lose the pyro, that's a given. Entrance itself ain't bad very moderate and to the point. The song choice is nice, but I am 100% sure it was either Fat Jacob Trance's or Brandon Hostile's I don't remember, so best to find another. Once you drop the pyro and fix the song its an Easy B+.

Look: B-

Attire isn't bad but face resembles default face 01. It looks like you spent zero time on the features of the caw, as such he looks inter changeable. To delve into the Attire it is simple and to the point, it has some nice accents, and the caw itself is very reminiscent of Randy Orton. I'd recommend a custom logo or 2 but if not attire once the face is changed is an easy B+ / A.

Presence: C+

This would have been a B- but it is readily apparent you are not awful at the sticks. In fact you hit quite a bit clutch reversals, on that front I was impressed. The reason for the C+ is quite simply your grasp of the OCW Style is not quite there yet. You held your own no question but you also suffered from a mess of hovering and while aggression is never a bad thing its how you go about it. As such it forced Tigerman to play a certain style which is evident, in other words he went eye for an eye on you. You hit your finisher and you kinda just stood there. Watch your fellow rookies or watch a Dupree or Parker match and you will get an idea on how to pace yourself. I am confident in your second match you will relax and notice how much better you do. As I said the reversals are there so your nearly at the point you need to be. An easy B+ next week.

Move-Set: B-

Didn't see many chain grapples due to the game. But off the top of my head lose the headstand headlock, (Its over used). As for everything else the move-set is pretty solid, id add a few "Athletic moves" since your trying to emulate Randy Orton (What I am getting could be wrong). I dug your Rivera Clash as no one worthwhile has used that move so make it your own.

 

Closing Thoughts:

I was very impressed by your in ring skill. You look to be pulling ahead of the pack skill wise, or at least for your debut match. You just need to touch up on the OCW style and make some minor changes and you can easily be a staple of Ambition and then Riot.

[Matsuda]

Why does Jordan Rivera look like Carlos Cruz?

 

Why does Carlos Cruz look like Jay Sensation?

 

Why does Jay Sensation look like...

 

http://www.urbanwrestlingfederation.com/data/19208/p42493.jpg

 

Jordan Rivera

 

Look: B-

[/b]Attire isn't bad but face resembles default face 01. It looks like you spent zero time on the features of the caw, as such he looks inter changeable. To delve into the Attire it is simple and to the point, it has some nice accents, and the caw itself is very reminiscent of Randy Orton. I'd recommend a custom logo or 2 but if not attire once the face is changed is an easy B+ / A.

 

 

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