Riot 357

[Jacob Trance]

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Okay, so Dupree does a RP becuase at present nothing seems to be going on, which is ultimately great. Writing something without having a clear objective can be tiresome, but Dupree nails it. Everything makes sense and Dupree is fast becoming a late 80's early 90's style wrestling villain. I don't know if this is a bad thing, but I'm now reading Duprees dialogue in the style of a Canadian Walt Jr because of his twitch.

 

Very good Leon RP, but I see what was said about some of the stuff being lifted straight from TV, but, it's not like nothing hasn't been done already, it's just about paraphrasing it in a manner that doesn't make it glaringly obvious. Pugh shows up, accuses Leon, then is swayed quite quickly by Leon saying "lol nope." That was odd, but let's see where it goes. We haven't had a Seltzer report in ages, unless he issues a magazine now, but if it's related to Powerslam it's not very factual. (TOPICAL!) Leon was at the top of the mountain when the summit was a lot further to get to, Nate, Versus, Majin, Death Row, Morrison, RD... So he knows how to hang.

 

Raze: This is the year that Justin Raze becomes the dominant in this ring! :(

 

At least you done a lot more than you usually do, and I jest, what you done was pretty good although I don't buy the fans chanting Raze or Champ so soon, considering, to be honest, you look like Walmart Parker, which is saying a lot, because Parker clearly shops in Target. You look like you'd beat the shit out of my dead grandmother. ON TO YOUR MATCH!

 

Oh, you ran backstage, to make your entrance. Did you use No Mercy to do your body morp... HEEEEEEEEEY I'M YOUR LIFE, I'M THE ONE WHO TOOK YOU THERE! Jeeeesuuuuuuuuus, I remember when Seth was a top guy and ready for the Big Gold :( Fall from grace indeed, props to Refridgerator Raze beating the hell out of him though.

 

ALL BUFF EVERYTHING!

 

The Juicebox cometh.... And leaveth.

[Parker]

Sid wanted us to use an attire with attitude. I didn't want to make something that looked like 90% of the roster. Kickpads and trunks. I'll obviously be changing the crest on the back. It was the only thing I could find that was suitable in the CC, and I am absolute shit at PT to make something myself. Not very good with attires anymore either.

 

Why jump at me though? We're not even ripping off the A&8's gimmick. We're not bikers. We look like them, therefore we are? What kind of mentality is that? You guys just really nitpick at everything.

 

On the real though; Cody whooped my ASS. I'd say I would have done better without two extra people being at ringside, but I doubt that. Cody's a monster and will definitely be the champ this year.

 

Yeah he looks great against mid carders and rusty HOF' ers who have been inactive almost 1 year :p \m/

[Pugh]

-Leon and his brain transplant could potentially be an awesome thing. As long as he doesn't slip into his old Leon self, I can see decent things in the future. Having somebody helping you out is what you've needed (and you've admitted as much) for a while, so i'm glad its happening.

 

-Raze. Please sort your character out. I get you're trying, but have somebody help you along and actually take their advice. You seem to be an amalgamation of thing you've seen work in wrestling, and because of that, you don't work. You need to define yourself - I'm still convinced you could pull off an OTT gimmick that defines you, and gives you something to write about. Right now you keep telling us you're going to dominate OCW, but you don't actually do anything toward it. This isn't me being mean, this is me trying to help you - please come up with something that you like, and you're willing to stick to... and make your head bigger. Other than that, you wrecked Seth. Poor Seth.

 

-Sean proving that he knows his character inside out and can get whatever he needs to over FAST. Definitely the success story of last year, and definitely has a big year ahead.

 

-Valmont, I don't get this RP. Where you say “By order of the general manager and management” you could have just said Leonheart… This would have quickly established that a) you know whats going on in OCW B) immediately you’d have some sort of heat with Leon C) You’re interesting. 6 security guards preparing to taze a paying fan is odd in the extreme.

 

-KD being KD – RIP Arnaud

 

-Dimsmore is an underrated RPer. When he finds the time, he delivers, no matter what he’s talking about. Just wish he’d find more time

 

-Sean vs KD is a good match but both of you need to deal with your morphing. Sean looks like a brawlin buddy and KD is half ballerina with those tiny feet. SOMEBODY HELP THESE POOR DISFIGURED MEN. Also, here we have the inherent issue with the “Double check” for the viewer. When someone outside of the two fighting records, it doesn’t pop up and this is fine – as long as you STILL do the double check. Its about showing your opponent that they’re double red. After that its down to trust. If you’re communicating with your opponent, it isn’t an issue, but if you try to force a redo because you weren’t communicating, that’s on you – we all have headsets, and we should all be able to trust each other the follow the rules. The best solution is to buy a cheap dazzle and be able to record yourself.

 

-Mugen and Tobin have a nice back and forth, and Tobin seems to love money. Look at those eyes lighting up!

 

-Cody seems to be kicking dust and waiting for things to come to him, and that’s probably not the best way to get what you want. I get it, you won a tournament, but going on about it isn’t really a storyline. Before you dipped out for the summer you were starting to pick up a head of steam, and since you’ve come back you’ve been in Sean’s shadow. You need to do something to step out of Sean’s shadow in all honesty. I’m not saying your RPs aren’t well constructed, they are, but I’d like to see you have a decent feud with somebody so that you’re back into your stride. If asking for title shots got you title shots then Justin Raze would look like this guy:

 

http://ilarge.listal.com/image/1824974/968full-ultimo-dragon.jpg

 

-I hope we have a best friends sitcom on our hands here. I HOPE!

 

-I feel like people are doing the Clark Effect wrong. Its not 60 minutes on ESPN, use it as a jumping off point, rather than a sit down interview. To me, it’s the closest thing we have to Piper’s Pit, Highlight Reel etc – and were always just platforms to get your feud over. Trance kinda does it right in this case though in the sense that he introduces KD into the mix. Could have done with a little less of the hairline humour, felt a little forced, but other than that it was good. It’s a well written RP, but now I know that I have KD vs Trance XXXVI to look forward too, I’m less thrilled. Hopefully they prove me wrong.

 

-The Mugen vs Tobin deal was an excellent idea, something fun and interesting to start a new season. Both of these hoes can go, so it was entertaining enough. Expecting both to have sterling seasons

 

-Matsuda firing everybody was good stuff. I hope his minions turn up at some point after their bioengineering stints with extra limbs etc

 

-This. I really didn’t like. Its babyface Justin Raze abusing a handicapped kid(?). If this is the OTT gimmick you were going for, then bravo, you nailed it. Its not the work of a good guy though. It really doesn’t sit right, even as a heel I don’t think. If you can save this, please do, but if you’re gonna keep doing it you need to turn heel. Or just abandon the whole thing. Whichever works. Again, I’m not trying to be mean, just trying to help.

 

-Ah Cerberus. We’re told they’re a stable out to get what they deserve. They deserve to head back to developmental and come up with something. Anything. They’ve been yelling amongst themselves for 2 months and 9 year looked like a pay off was coming… except now its not the payoff because everything is forgotten? I feel like going back to the original mindset they had of “Leon will help us get to the top” would help them. Leon can be the catalyst to so many feuds, because he has so many enemies in wrestling, but I don’t feel like that potential has truly been realised. To me, when Cody came back from his sabbatical, they should have pulled the trigger on a Cody vs Sean feud, killed the group and sent them both on their way. Leon could have still managed Cody and it would have all been nice. Leon’s turn on them might be the best thing that could happen to them though, so I hope it pans out.

 

-Gibbs and Crowe is as mean as I was expecting. Kindred are coming 4 u suckas! I hope we get more gimmick matches this year, because some people are good at dreaming up nasty things on the fly.

 

-Parker being Parker. Leon trying to style it out at the end is something I don’t feel like we’d have seen in the past, so bravo .

 

-Gibbs always delivers. He takes you by the eyes and forces you into the scene without you even having to lift a finger. That’s a skill… and it’s a good RP to boot.

 

-Cody vs Aries was gonna go one of two ways. Aries was gonna out do him at every step OR Cody was going to manhug him into submission. Unfortunately, it was the manhugs. Not the worst match in the world, but it was always Cody’s. Was genuinely shocked when Cody threw a combo – HAS HE FINALLY ADDED THE MISSING ELEMENT TO HIS ARSENAL? Having Aries back and motivated is hopefully a good thing. The attire deal has been addressed, so I won’t go over it, but I feel weird about Sid killing his momentum and becoming Aries’ right hand man (Which is kinda how the entrance, and the RPs at the end of last season were feeling).

 

-Tobin and Mugen again with a solid RP. Nice to see everyone getting involved

 

-Sid is Leon!

 

-Matsuda is mean. Pato feels weird talking, but A BEAST HE STILL IS. The villain always goes over (almost more than Leon!) Stacy Clarke thinks she’s on The Amanda Show. DON’T BREAK THE FOURTH WALL STACY

 

-Main Event went down nicely (The Villain always goes over). Parker with some decent work on the video and Dimsmore got his head smashed in. Hollywood wandering back in completes the group. Hope he's strong because he's helping carry OCW again (\m/). Perfect night in my eyes. #CHAMP

[Parker]

Cody need to change his hair..he looks like a ring girl following Sean to the ring in the shield intro

[Matsuda]

Actually thinking about it, I completely agree with Pugh on what Cody's return should have been. Granted I don't mind Sillybus aside from their two hour entrance sequence, but if Cody wanted momentum to get a title shot that would have been the way to go. Say he made his big return and with Leon's help he turns on Sean McGee, who legitimately became too big of a star in both of their absence. Have a good month long feud that Cody probably ends up winning (sorry Sean \m/) and you have a Hebrew on a roll into a title shot. It's a much more interesting story and feels less stagnant.

[Mr.Sensation]

The Son of God was supposed to come back and feud with me, but I'm in jail :(

 

As a consolation prize Cerebus is at it's tipping point. Sean and Cody feel it's going to be there time with Leonheart in control of things. But after the power play by the youngsters things have turned out for the worst a Leon is now asserting his position of control.

 

So this can go a few ways, they can overcome the rising tide, stick it to leon, or one of them can implode due to the pressure killing Cerberus but quite possibly starting a mega fued.

 

In a most shocking turn of event's Matsuda goes over! Did not see that coming!

[Matsuda]

The Son of God was supposed to come back and feud with me, but I'm in jail :(

 

As a consolation prize Cerebus is at it's tipping point. Sean and Cody feel it's going to be there time with Leonheart in control of things. But after the power play by the youngsters things have turned out for the worst a Leon is now asserting his position of control.

 

So this can go a few ways, they can overcome the rising tide, stick it to leon, or one of them can implode due to the pressure killing Cerberus but quite possibly starting a mega fued.

 

 

Flake.

[K.Dangelo]

Fav 5

Parker ,Sean ,Cody ,Dupree ,raze,Pugh ,Suda ,Tobin ,Mugen,Gibbs ,Crowe,Pato and Aries .

[Pugh]

but quite possibly starting a mega fued.

 

 

Possible. If Cerberus had a full line up change.

[Vincent Valmont]

-Valmont, I don't get this RP. Where you say “By order of the general manager and management” you could have just said Leonheart… This would have quickly established that a) you know whats going on in OCW B) immediately you’d have some sort of heat with Leon C) You’re interesting. 6 security guards preparing to taze a paying fan is odd in the extreme.

 

Just clarifying that I put in general manager, and management in the RP due I didn't want to confuse anyone reading thinking that suddenly me, and leon hate each other again to possibly feud. I wanted it to be like a whole party vote on the banishment. Not just GM, but all of ocw's management decided. I known before hand what's been going on in OCW. Been watching. As for 6 guards maybe a few too many, but not all of them was going to tazer me. Plus I'm not just any ordinary paying fan. :) The RP was supposed to be directly before irving vs raze.

 

Hopefully it helps to understand it better. I'm still slowly shaking off rust with the RP writing. Any criticism good or bad is welcomed. Makes me change for the better.

 

As for Riot I myself will also write a lengthy review upcoming today. I enjoyed this episode of Riot. For the first Riot of the new season I got good feelings about OCW. I like to read so having alot of RPs to do so was awesome. I'll comment more about Riot later...